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[NGHH'11 - Gunner-D&Mao]

You hit a lot of the words on the list but the rhymes aren't great and your diction is pretty mumbly and off-beat. I think part of this is due to the 'lazy brass' in the beat and overall it gives the song a rough sloppy feel to it... Which would be okay if it were easier to understand. The issue is that it's not.

MaoDaMighty responds:

Thanks man, I appreciate this great feedback you've been given me. I hear ya on the poor diction and weakness in clarity; I can barely understand a lot of my older works without squintin my ears. Ill be workin on improving it in le future.

[NGHH2011 - GRIM vs Waus]

Waus threw a few personals (accent, guns, stacking chips) but didn't hit hard. Murdaa flowed much better and his impression in his second verse was a knockout punch right there. Awesome beat, sounds very exotic.

[NGHH KO2 - TheIconic vs Gloine]

Icon V1 - Strong metaphors but lots of filler. What is with this guy and kid's shows? Between this and his battle with Gasmasq he's made references to Hillary Duff, Monsters Inc, Lilo and Stitch and All That.

Gloine V1 - Lots of nice flips, compensates for the lack of personals. Once he runs out of those it seems like he falls back on filler.

Icon V2 - "I'm 80 you're 20" is a poor follow-up to a potentially good flip. A few half-flips kind of brought this verse down. Points for trying though.

Gloine V2 - Came with a lot of venom but like his first verse he seemed to run out of fire and end it with a bunch of self hype.

Gloine to advance.

[NGHH'11 - MadFLeX vs Gasmasq]

MadFlex V1 - Fancy a-a hype filler, name diss, Hazardous Materials diss, philosophy diss, mayor diss, Nimbus/Cynic name drop, transitive property diss, fake accent diss. Damn. Wow. Consistent flow and look at all those goddamn punches. Couldn't make out the 'attach and you're on your ass crack' line.

Gasmasq V1 - Nice transitive property flip but lacking in clarity (saddest of the variables is constants or class of the variables?), nice letter/better/clever follow-up, addressing the redundancy of MadFlex's rhyme scheme is great, attacks a majority of his bars in one fell swoop, nice name diss, only hip hop in this competition, didn't understand the ass crack flip (see above), master of ceremonies seemed a little awkward and broke the flow. Overall great verse, stayed on subject TENACIOUSLY. Each bar felt it had relevance to the last one for the majority of the verse.

MadFlex V2 - Immediate re-flip of the transitive property line, star overnight is another great flip, publicist, open mic, cracker diction (repeated from previous verse, uh...), alt account diss, Skype diss, something quick about Grim that I didn't catch, algebra (didn't he already flip that line at the beginning?), homeless diss. Hard verse, still consistent, a few personals and some flips this time.

Gasmasq V2 - Runs off beat a little bit. Name diss is a personal but kind of weak, tampon line is okay but seems a little late, it belonged in the first verse. 'Took another rapper's name' should have either been next to the first name diss or left out entirely. Live with your parents is a weak diss since he just attacked you for being HOMELESS. Wastes a few bars on closing the battle.

Gasmasq put up a hell of a fight but dropped the ball a bit on the second verse and overall MadFlex buried Gas in his own dirt. Top battle though.

[HDC: Klazik v Mao III]

You both need to speak up or tone down the beat, I could barely hear either of you. The clarity issue was made worse by neither of you really having much of a rap voice.

Klazik V1 - Went off beat a few times, seems to waste a lot of bars and uses lots of filler, also why is he whispering? The 'piss and shit' line was practically a reverse finisher, made him look worse.

Mao V1 - I like the "what'chu doin?" at the beginning, seems like an appropriate response to Klazik's verse. Not sure if potatomelon is supposed to be a personal, seems like there was a lot of off-beat mumbling too.

Klazik V2 - Asian involved in a train? Sorry, what?

Mao V2 - Interesting steak knives line was immediately brought down by a mom diss.

What is this I don't even...

Mao to advance. He brought better stage presence and didn't hurt himself as badly as Klazik on his verses. Both could have come a lot more aggressive both in delivery and lyrics. If there was a single personal in that whole battle I didn't catch it.

HDC responds:

Thanks for the vote!

Mao-1
Klazik-0

[Big Red ft.Grim - The Road]

Pretty strong track, I just feel like it was missing a little polish. Part of it is mic quality, part of it might be mastering. The chorus seemed a little off key, Grimcredible's vox seemed pretty grainy. Other than that this is a really cool track.

[Clab - Maverick Vs Pigpen]

Maverick - Lots of filler. Lots. Calling him out on rapping slow and being 26 are the only ones I could pick out, unless the last line is in reference to PiGPEN ending up on the news following V-Tech Rampage. Fucking love this kid's voice though, it's annoying but addictive, like having an itch and scratching it at the same time.

PiGPEN - So chill, so effortless. This guy must bust his ass over every verse but when he records you'd never know it. Flip. Flip. Flip. Flip. Knock out. Singing was funny too.

[Irregular Beat]

Not sure if I'm counting this the same way you are but it does add up. I counted it like this:
7 8 7 8 4 7 8 8 7 8 7 8 4 7 8 8
Not sure if the 7 8 8 7 was supposed to show up in the count or if it's just syncopation.

I'll give you 4/5 stars for the originality, but the sad truth is the beat could be better. The rhythm isn't particularly catchy (in fact it barely makes sense, other than the recurring 7+8 alternating), but I think the real turn-off here is that it sounds too mild. I'm not a huge fan of dubstep, but I think some heavy industrial sounds would better fit the jerky irregularity of the beat. Chill syncopation sounds almost like an oxymoron to me.

I've been looking for something like this, though, so you can count on me to try writing a few bars for this.

[CLAB - suddle vs Butsaay]

2011 - DQ'ed against Smorgishmorg
2012 - DQ'ed against KillBillVolume2
2013 - DQ'ed against Butsaay

Guess he had to keep his streak going.

Suddle really flows with this beat. I like the lazy low-energy thing, especially as he seems to 'run out' of energy towards his finisher. "What else could a butt say?" is a sick closer too. Butsaay came pretty hard although with his higher energy on this beat it seemed like he was kind of babbling over the beat, especially with veteran/better than, but 'at that quality/next to that obviously' was a very strong flip.

I'd have liked to see the battle finished although it's really funny that Suddle has gotten DQed every year that he competed.