linez V1 - Name of this beat is a little creative, 'guns in the street' is a model line for describing the mass amount of filler in the rest of the verse.
Jiirohbomb V1 - Rhymes are terribly predictable, noticed a War-Spawn flip but couldn't really understand it.
linez V2 - Mother's house/mother's pouch is clever, it's also hilarious how the last line is "you told everyone you gave up" and then Jiiroh doesn't respond. DAMN.
Overall not many personals but linez has more mic presence.
Murdaa V1 - Really nice flow and rhymes, problem is content. Only personals were 'emo dude' and the Pokemon line. Every verse should have at least one knockout punch, this didn't.
Exceptid V1 - I like the slow delivery, provides a nice contrast, nice 'spits fast' personal. Presentation/wasted is an example of Exceptid's shortcomings though. Is that supposed to be a slant rhyme? Seizure and gangster lines are awesome.
Murdaa V2 - I could barely understand this verse at all, except for a brief mention of Pokemon. Redundancy is bad.
Exceptid V2 - Nice name diss, 'can't understand you' is a nice rhyme with 'take a shower I command you', also works as a nice personal since it's hard to flip something you can't understand, same goes for the mental hospital line and the Daft Punk line. The one thing I'd take off is the finisher is pretty weak.
Really nice delivery on both sides but Murdaa lacks in content.
Mic quality is mediocre and diction is inconsistent; sometimes over-enunciated and sometimes unintelligible. Delivery is overall emotionless and full of filler. Voice acting is funny but 8track is not a rapper.
MadFlex V1 - Nice opener with RetVox, a few name disses, nice pointing out 6000 forum posts, girls on his monitor is pretty strong, ending with more RetVox lines is a little redundant but overall a strong verse.
GreenSkullKid V1 - Decent punches with MadFlex and BigRed, then all of a sudden "I'll fuck your sister". Shit's sake, way too much of this totally irrelevant garbage, "pussy faggot wiener gay" is a nice tongue-in-cheek finisher but in the end it's like you're flipping your own verse.
MadFlex V2 - Goes right on the offensive with all of the sex jokes. Macking pussy/tracking cookies is exquisite and brilliantly creative. Delivery on 'filthy whore just like her' is positively venomous. A lot of the following bars are 'copied all his last flow with no repeating' - if I were GreenSkull I would have flipped this so hard. Seems like there's not a whole lot of research going on here which brings the verse down. However, lost hopscotching lunatic/ruined it/move it bitch is a totally awesome finisher.
GreenSkull V2 - Decent filler, I like the metaphors, punches and flow change-ups but this verse is all filler.
Overall you guys both have great delivery but MadFlex attacks way way more. MadFlex to advance.
Too much sample, not enough beat. It's funny but I feel like some kind of wub wub bass would have made this whole thing pick up. I'm not a huge dubstep fan but this could have afforded to have more energy in it.
Scuare V1 - Nice opener, white trash, called out for gay bashing. Really great delivery, a few strong punches but a lot of filler.
Emergency V1 - I would have flipped that opener so much harder than "Rav got his ass kicked". Emergency just beat Rav, Scuare just beat tvJohnny. You could have easily come in with "How does it feel to know you won because of _____". Anyway you still flipped the Rav line. Name diss, decent Texas line, still some filler though.
Scuare V2 - The beast awakens, lol. Effortless Texas flip, B flip, Sesame Street flip (holy shit), dickriding flip, asking friends.
Emergency V2 - Sesame Street flip is decent, Burger King line would have been decent if you'd had some kind of follow-up but as-is it's a claim with nothing to back it up. No videos and Skype are personals but don't hit that hard.
Scuare mopped it up with his second verse.
Gloine V1 - Nice opener, stop hitting me up, punch concrete was filler but had some awesome imagery, fucking with that -> bunnies in hats was filler too but fairly creative, under my wing is a nice finisher.
Blest V1 - Big words but not a lot of punches and even then the punches were filler. If you want to get techy about rap, use multis, not big words. Greek mythology was the only thing that was specific and it wasn't even a personal. Delivery was quite dry.
Gloine V2 - Recycling the same big words BECAUSE THERE IS NO RHETORIC is a knockout punch, yelling is a nice hit, illmortal+Boss reference personal but again not a punch.
Blest V2 - Stay on topic, please? Admitting you recycled your material is okay if you have a follow-up, but for shit's sake don't just leave it hanging there, otherwise it's like you're conceding. Collaborated with me is a personal but not a knockout, diction is almost snobbish on that last line too.
How lovably simple. I feel like you could have put in another few layers on top of this, but it would have ruined the simplicity. This is exactly what it's supposed to be.
This has kind of an artificial feel to it but when I saw this was a sample battle I found it excusable. This is very impressive for what it is. It carries a mood and a really dope beat. Boosting the bass on some of the samples might have given this more punch but otherwise this is a success.
You hit a lot of the words on the list but the rhymes aren't great and your diction is pretty mumbly and off-beat. I think part of this is due to the 'lazy brass' in the beat and overall it gives the song a rough sloppy feel to it... Which would be okay if it were easier to understand. The issue is that it's not.
Thanks man, I appreciate this great feedback you've been given me. I hear ya on the poor diction and weakness in clarity; I can barely understand a lot of my older works without squintin my ears. Ill be workin on improving it in le future.
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NGHH KO1 - linez vs Jirohbomb 
CLAB- Scuare vs Emergency 
