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[Project Ruffy]

I had no idea you were still working on this, but coming back to it now, it looks pretty good! The score system and presence of an actual objective make this pretty enjoyable. I really like the variety of hazards in the game as well.

Some things of note:
- Explaining the controls in the game would probably work better than clicking through a text explanation of all of it. Explain a mechanic, then force the player to demonstrate understanding of that mechanic to pass an obstacle and move on. I'm pretty sure you're using FeindishDemon's platform engine which is ironic as his tutorial actually begins this way.
- In terms of player experience, the zoomed in camera and slow movement speed make the whole game feel a little sluggish. Being able to run through the level faster would have definitely made for a more enjoyable experience.
- The game doesn't seem to distinguish between pressing a button and holding it. This means you can double jump by holding the jump button instead of tapping it twice, and you have to hold the D button rather than pressing repeatedly to execute an attack combo. From a player feedback perspective, it feels a bit better if you can make each button press correlate with a discrete action rather than holding.
- There's nothing to attack. Enemy AI is hard to code but having some destructible walls would be a nice easy way to utilize the work you've already done in coding and animating the attacks.
- Hazards drain health gradually instead of taking a one-time chunk of health from the player and knocking them back with some invincibility frames. A single instance of damage with a knockback and damage animation/sound gives better player feedback and makes it clearer when they've messed up.
- Hitboxes need fixing. It looks like the actual sprite of the buzzsaws is the hitbox itself, which means that you can hit invisible corners on the buzzsaw (the part between the circle and corners here -> [O]) and take damage from it. Creating invisible hitbox sprites inside your Movie Clip to better represent what needs to collide will help this feel more fair and natural.
- Coins are placed in pretty arbitrary positions; collecting them doesn't add much to the game so much as it just slows you down. I would recommend putting some behind optional hazards so that there's a risk/reward component to your score. Similarly, some kind of timer might raise the skill ceiling of the game and improve replay value.
- Lack of background and texture for the platforms make this look a lot less polished than it is. A simple parallax background and even just some chicken scratches and bevel filter on the platforms would make the game look like a complete project.

If you're open to it, I'd be happy to help you fix most of this stuff. I know I've written a lot here, but with the right guidance it shouldn't take more than a week to fix them.

MebroukTheCat responds:

Well, to be honest... Most of the programming codes were copied from a YouTube video uploaded by jemaster800:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=8AG_BUSfDc4

It's like I drew the Mona Lisa with a crayon and here's why:

The advantage: It can work.

The disadvantage: It's not perfect.

[Knight and Prison of Ice]

This is a really fun concept. I really enjoyed manipulating the sword and setting up attacks, and getting a good combo on a series of enemies in a line was also really satisfying. The hitboxes took some getting used to; I kept expecting the game to have some kind of perspective with hitboxes being around where the sword's shadow was, but realizing any part of the sword could collide made a huge difference since I didn't have to be as careful about aiming. Similarly the lack of explanation in the game in general was a bit of a hindrance; the in-game tutorial says to use O to use powerups, whereas on a keyboard it's Z. In addition, it's not explained what a "blessing" is until you buy one, and I noticed some powerups advertised as permanent (like the movement buff) went away after dying. An actual tutorial level would work wonders here.

Sadly, this game suffers from major lack of features. There are really only two enemy types (the towers and bubbles) and while each has their own variants (aimed shots, 4-directional shots, difference in health) they play largely the same to each other. The fact that the levels just rehash the same enemy types (and upgrades) repeatedly makes seriously discourages the player from getting deeper into the game.

I would like to see this concept expanded on, and I think some more enemy types (as well as more complex behavior) is the way to go here, as well as allowing the player to fight multiple types in the same room, and bigger rooms so the player has enough space to maneuver. Some ideas off the top of my head:
- Enemies that strafe perpendicular to the player so you have to time your attack.
- Enemies that deliberately try to get out from between the player and sword, perhaps you have to find some way to trap or block them to line up your shot, or you have to chase after them.
- More area denial, such as enemies that leave traps on the ground.
- Enemies that have shields or specific weak points that force you to attack from a specific angle instead of just calling the sword to you from any direction.
- A "twin" enemy that has two independent parts but can only be damaged if you hit them both at the same time.
- Some kind of bonus for hitting multiple enemies with a single sword swipe. Gold as a reward feels like really delayed gratification, what if you could charge up your special abilities through combos?
- I notice the sword has a hitbox that the player can't run through. I think using the sword as a shield to hide behind could make for some interesting gameplay and I'd like harder enemies designed around this idea.

voidgazerBon responds:

Thank you for detailed and valuable feedback. I really appreciate it!

[Tracie's Pursuit]

It looks like the game has a glitch, I was able to "fill up the affection meter" with one heart and IM Pico, he said his backpack and locker were open when they weren't. I assume the two endings are getting blocked and getting friend zoned?

For two weeks this isn't bad (especially seeing as you did everything yourself) but it's obviously quite short. It's really lacking things to do - even the quest items just help you fill up the affection meter which triggers the next scene, so there's no real problem solving or item usage to speak of, just collecting. It's also bizarre having what imitates a dating simulator but only getting one choice at the start of like three conversations you can have with Pico.

None of the components (art, gameplay, music) are bad, but nothing stands out, either. Many Game Jam games flop because they overscope and a half-finished game is released, it feels like this had the opposite problem with a fully functional end product but not a lot going on in it.

Loopykins responds:

Thank you for your in depth review <3

[Homecoming]

The animation here is really fantastic and I'm really rooting for this to win best animation with interactive elements because it really does look stunning. For the length of the Jam it's also a really impressive quantity of animation to produce at this quality.

Story-wise I found the choreography and dialogue good, but I didn't really understand why it started and ended when it did. From a narrative perspective we begin with the status quo of "protagonist alienated from family," then a conflict where she's forced to engage, and that arc is resolved by the character removing herself. The funeral and eulogy don't tie into this original arc, and we don't even get to hear the eulogy. The story also starts a little slow, it's not until the argument with the mother that the conflict came to the surface and I felt really engaged.

I suspected this was nonfiction so perhaps there are privacy reasons for the actual eulogy being omitted. If this is true, it also makes sense that there's no catharsis or conclusion because real life doesn't get wrapped up like that and as Bojack's writers would say, you can't have a happy ending because there's always more show. But Coming Out Simulator is a great example of how you can take creative liberties or even just break the fourth wall to make a story feel like it actually has an ending.

Bleak-Creep responds:

It’s not quite non-fiction. While the characters themselves are based in truth, the story itself is entirely fictional.

The funeral and trying to navigate all these complicated feelings surrounding her father are really at the core of what I wanted to do with the project. The conflict is meant to mostly be an internal one; what is she supposed to say? It’s all about balancing the expectations of others with her own experience. In my eyes, the speech is in the events preceding, having one at the end would only feel redundant.

Thank you for playing and all the kind words! :)

[Orphanarium]

The visual and audio presentation here is great. All the essential ingredients are here.

Gameplay-wise it's simple and linear but it plays really well. There are really only a handful of places to go, once you've explored things, and as a scaled down Metroidvania it's pretty obvious where to go when you pick up a new item. The platforming is generally pretty easy and this is probably the biggest gameplay issue.

I think my biggest frustration with the game is having to restart after every ending. I only got the Devastating ending and having to redo everything for a new ending is a real pain. You could circumvent this either by allowing save files, or by having a checkpoint you can go back to before making story-relevant decisions.

Veinom responds:

Yeah, I see what you mean, and it is something I had in mind. What I did about it, is giving each ending a Reward that can make the next playthroughs easier. The Devastating ending is the most easy to get, and tells the player how to go further as Evil Ucogi. I thought that this would have been a good incentive to retry. If you do retry, there's another ending that tells you how to get all the first 3 items.

Perhaps you are right, the Devastating ending would be a better fit to give the 3 items, since up to that point, the game is linear, and there are no other endings before getting the 3 items. I will try to fix this.

Edit: The Devastating ending now gives a shortcut Reward. Thanks for the feedback!

[Sport Dungeon]

It's a neat concept but it's missing a lot. The movement speed is just slow enough to be frustrating, and it looks like the attack plays an animation of a single projectile instead of using attachMovie, which means that bullets vanish if you restart the animation.

The whole game is one boss fight which is pretty easy since the attack animations don't target the player, have blind spots where the player will never be hit, and the hands and head don't have to be targeted separately to win.

The animation is pretty good but like the rest of the game feels a bit too slow. I wonder if it would help to just increase the framerate of the whole game?

fmdavid responds:

Thank you for taking the time to play and give your opinion, I'm glad to hear it, I'll take all those flaws into account for a future update (when the competition ends permanently).

[Dwarf Planet One]

This is super cool on pretty much every front and is far beyond what I expected out of this Jam. The animation could not be better, the visual effects are fantastic, the music is atmospheric, and the premise of a puzzle platformer with shifting gravity is really neat.

On the other hand it needs a lot more explanation and player guidance than currently exists.

You receive the flag but you're not told what the flag does. You get the hand tool but you're never told what THAT does. The levels are pretty big so you're not sure where you're supposed to go, and certain objects or enemies you encounter are never explained, which can be particularly daunting on levels where you've already done a bunch of work to reach a certain point and don't want to start over from doing trial and error with something that drains your health. Even the intro seems to have no real connection to the gameplay and this disconnect isn't addressed within the first half hour of gameplay.

I'd happily play through the entire thing if I knew what the heck I was supposed to do.

Emrox responds:

Hey thanks, glad you like it! As far as the lack of instruction - to some extent the "point" of the game was supposed to be that you see all this weird stuff and you don't know what it does and you kind of figure it out by interacting with things and trying out different things (like zelda 1, or something) but obviously that kind of design-aesthetic choice has to be handled well for people to not feel frustrated or alienated by it. I don't know how well I did on that front - I had to cut some stuff toward the end of development that would have guided the player better and made the "story" make more sense, and ultimately the game ended up being even *more* vague and impenetrable than I had intended! oops.

if it helps, the point of the flag is just for you to mark where you've been, and help you find your way around with the arrow. I might update the text to say that, so people don't think they need to put the flag on something to win the game, or something like that.

[Ricardo Goes To War!]

This is pretty fun. The graphics are nice (except for that horrid looking stop sign) and the sound design is functional. The gameplay is simple but fun enough to be worth playing several times. As to be expected from a 53xy83457 game there are a gazillion animations based on where you shoot someone which is a nice layer of polish.

A bit more complexity or length (perhaps different levels or a boss fight) would be appreciated.

53xy83457 responds:

All the animations for shooting people were TheAsterDood02's doing this time. I fucked up the helicopter pilot but that's about it. Now the lack of complexity and length, I'll gladly take credit for that.

[Skeleton Day]

The premise for this is absolutely hilarious. The last several games I've played I haven't been too enthused by the plot, but this one was really funny! Apart from that the art and music sound great and the controls, simple as they are, work just fine.

Regarding flaws... As you say it's very short and it's too bad there's no real gameplay, be it puzzles or combat.

TeamTamago responds:

Thanks! Hopefully after a couple of bug fixes I can continue the story and add some more "game" game to it

[Assassinating the Guards]

Well, it's a Henry Stickman tribute. I don't mind these, but the actual quality of the animation is very crude. Some actual frame by frame animation instead of just tweens (and some easing on the tweens) would go a long way toward making this feel more fleshed out, since the animation really is the cornerstone of the "choose your animation" genre.

There also isn't a whole lot in terms of branching choices but for a Game Jam game this is totally excusable.

iShadowzz08 responds:

ty 4 the constructive criticism.